
Thought I'd shove some rough drafts of some of my work up here, so everyon can tell me how bad they are

First, yes I do realize I haven't got a lot of detail, and some of the stuff needs to be re-worded, any advice would be appreciated.
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The smell of death hung heavily in the air as the fire smoldered in the distance from the two men.
One was tall and thin, the other short and fat. Both wore dark black cloaks and robes that made them disappear into the shadows.
The tall man had a big grin upon his face as he watched the fire blaze in the distance, "It is done." he said matter-of-factly.
The short man responded with a curt nod, and turned away from the blaze. He muttered a few words, and made a gesture with his hand.
A bright blue oval appeared in front of him, and he stepped eagerly through it.
The tall man continued to watch the blaze for a moment longer, then followed his companion, through the portal, a small piece of paper fluttering to the ground behind him.
After the portal disappeared, a small bird flew down from his perch upon a nearby tree, and picked up the piece of paper in it's beak, and flew off towards the fire, which now seemed to be a lot smaller than a moment before.
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My main problem seems to be figuring out how to go about giving peoples names.
Depending on what you read, people aren't introduced until someone in the scene calls them by their name. Other times the writer just puts the name in almost immediately.
Argh!
And the last line is a bit crappy too.