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Unread postby Shu Ryorin » Thu Aug 04, 2005 2:16 am

Thanks, Waking! ^_^ I had another really good one that I wrote there, but I lost it. :cry: Here's one I wrote for school a few months ago:

Songe of Beauty

Beautiful is this world,
So full of wonder,
As the dancing leaf makes not a single blunder.
Beautiful is this world,
As the song of the birds is gentle thunder.
The wonders of the universe unfurled,
Beautiful is this world,
So full of wonder.


I had to write a poem following a structure. I don't remember what this particular type of poem's called, but whatever. How did I do?
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-some fairy in "Breath of Fire III"

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Unread postby Waking Dragon » Mon Aug 08, 2005 2:17 am

It's nice I like it AND I agree with it. "Beautiful" poem. :)
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Unread postby Shu Ryorin » Mon Aug 08, 2005 9:56 pm

Thank you. *bows*

Garden

Pebble in the sky,
Deep shining blue, swirling white,
Garden of all life.



For once a haiku! This was also done for school. Please tell me what you think.
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Unread postby Waking Dragon » Tue Aug 23, 2005 2:43 pm

Shu Ryorin wrote:Thank you. *bows*

Garden

Pebble in the sky,
Deep shining blue, swirling white,
Garden of all life.



For once a haiku! This was also done for school. Please tell me what you think.


I like the referring of the sky as you protrayed beautifully.
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Unread postby Shu Ryorin » Wed Aug 24, 2005 12:01 am

Thank you, Waking! ^_^

Wonderful Creatures

pandas
black, white
eating, sleeping, dreaming
Epiphany of gentle creatures
wonderful



That was also for school. I broke from form a bit, and was rather bored so I wrote it about pandas. ^_^
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Unread postby Waking Dragon » Wed Aug 24, 2005 2:48 pm

Shu Ryorin wrote:Thank you, Waking! ^_^

Wonderful Creatures

pandas
black, white
eating, sleeping, dreaming
Epiphany of gentle creatures
wonderful



That was also for school. I broke from form a bit, and was rather bored so I wrote it about pandas. ^_^


Pretty good, but I must say the mini "Garden" one was a little more pleasant than this but still good though. Hope to see more. :)
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Unread postby Shu Ryorin » Fri May 12, 2006 7:08 am

Hello! I'm sorry for being gone for so long!(I blame the School Work Gnomes) Any way, I've been writing several poems for school lately, so I decided to drop in and see what everyone's thoughts are on them. The theme for this one was "Masks and Mirrors." I apologize in advance for it's length.

Within the Eyes

I wander a forest,
A place in my dreams,
I come upon a pool,
And gaze in.
I skip a stone,
And it bounces across my face,
At last sinking into an eye,
Staring up at me, the only thing that shows,
That there is something,
There is everything,
Beneath this deceitful surface.
Gazing into my rippling eyes,
The reflections of my soul,
I see that this face,
Staring down into this pool,
Is not my face at all,
But a cheap plaster mask,
A fortress made of clay,
Within to hide my pain and fear,
My loneliness.
Within to lock away all my insecurities and doubts,
Only to have them multiply,
Only to create new fears,
Fears of what others would think if I had no mask,
Of what others would say if they really knew me.
I grow sick of these lies that I have become,
And rip them away,
Only to look back at the pool and find another mask,
Layered beneath the first.
I tear away these disgusting masks,
One by one,
An infinite number,
Only to find another in each one’s place,
And with each mask, growing stronger,
A pain within my soul,
Until I can tear no more.
I fall to my knees,
Suffocating behind my masks,
Drowning in my insecurities,
And I weep, for I will never be free,
Of this retched cage of lies.
I cry from behind my mask of tears,
For anyone to help me,
To find me,
I feel a hand on my shoulder,
And whirl around,
To see a Man standing before me,
Wounded and scarred.
He looks at me with eyes as loving and warm,
As His honest, unmasked face.
Child,
He says to me,
Let me to wash your face.
He raises a cloth,
A piece of fine, white linen,
When He lowers it,
I feel a joy,
For I am finally free.
I stand in a forest,
And there, reflected,
Within the His deep brown eyes,
I at last see me.


Please tell me what you think!(and if you have suggestions for stanza breaks, those would be appreciated, too!)
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Unread postby Shu Ryorin » Sun Aug 06, 2006 9:34 pm

Okay... here's the next poem I did for Poetry class. It had to have some sort of connection with classical style poetry and the theme was "fortune". See if you can get the reference. :wink:

Chinese Food Tangent

I received a note the other day,
My very own message in a bottle.
I pulled away the shell and read,
“Focus on the There And Back Again
Instead of the long journey’s end.”
As I read, before my eyes appeared
Burglar and Bearded Singers.
In my mind they forged ahead
To Smaug the dragon’s dreaded lair,
Being challenged on every hill,
Gaining strength from their experiences
To in the end defeat the Beast
And win his precious stolen horde.
But my cookie’s wisdom says they gained
A fortune other than the wyrm’s gold,
But most of all their memories
And legacies of deeds bold.
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Unread postby Shu Ryorin » Wed Aug 23, 2006 12:36 am

For this poem we were suposed to write about what caim to mind while listening to classical music. One song had a fiddle in it and made me think of Fiddler on the Roof.

Fiddle

Once again we must leave,
Abandoning all we have known
In our long, long instant of life.
“Why must we again be driven?”
We cry out in our hearts.
Why again, why now,
Why must this heart-wrenching cycle continue?
Why are we so hated?
We are not so very different from them.
Yet we sling over our backs what we can
And bury our dead,
And we dare not turn
Our blurred eyes back towards the flames,
Nor do we dare look up
At our smoky dreams.
Once again, we leave.
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Unread postby Jer » Wed Aug 23, 2006 12:42 am

Your Within the eyes is a beautiful work. I liked that one the most of the new three.
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